Sooner or later I need to do a chapter that flashes back to Aimee getting hired at the diner, or even just a chapter that shows how bad her anxiety can be. So far I’ve done more telling than showing, on that front. In the meantime, her safe-space won’t feel so safe, between Mercy’s 180 and Mary just casually claiming to be a werewolf…
Archives
Should Daisy be less worried, or more?
The good news is, Daisy’s new assistant manager isn’t Rose, as she feared! I’m not sure she’d find this to be much better, though.
Something I can’t quite convey on the page – the way I hear the characters in my head, is Lily has song-bird like inflection to her voice, like Disney’s Snow White, or the good witch from The Wizard of Oz. She’s chipper nearly all the time. Mercy, on the other hand, sounds much more like Maleficent. Her words just ooze bitterness and spite. But on this page? Mercy’s doing an impression of her sister (Lily) that’s so spot-on, for people who know her I doubt it could be anything other than unsettling.
I think it’s gonna be a bit longer than 5 minutes
She TIRED
“Five more minutes” indeed
Toxic Finale
That’s it for this chapter! Although there is more to tell…
To keep things simple, I have a couple of images planned where the girls ask their parents for a few more details. Candice has a more involved follow-up which could be its own wordy chapter, spread over several pages… but I’m burned out on comics at the moment, and don’t want to draw it. Not to mention, the room it would take place in, the atmosphere… I won’t be able to draw and render it the way I’m picturing it in my head, it’d be so much easier to describe… so that’s what I might do – rather than illustrating it, I may treat it as a chapter of a novel.
Toxic Candy pg 9
Toxic Candy pg 8
Twisting the knife
Toxic Candy pg 6
Picking up where we left off at page 4, Mercy may just strangle Candice before the day is done…
Things that didn’t make the final cut –
- Daisy’s “they’re called breasts” line used to go further – “surely you’re rich enough to buy yourself a pair!”. That bit was cut simply because threw off the flow of Candice’s mud-slinging.
- Right up until publication, Mercy had a line or two in the last panel. It went through several rewrites, which all amounted to “this means war”. In the end, having her say nothing made more sense.